'Why do you have to make everything so ugly?'

Barry and myself met up Thursday night to go through the first draft of Jobs and try and smooth its rough edges. I had some ideas about how I could improve on it, he had come armed with a copy of the script with notes scrawled across it. Sounds bad, but actually much of it consisted of 'great - love this bit!'. Everything he said was invaluable and we chewed the fat for some hours, knocking ideas back and forth again. At one point we were in tearful hysterics at an idea for one scene, god knows what our neighbouring drinkers thought!

Odd thing was, between the first draft and the meeting I had stumbled across the ostensibly 'missing' final page of Barry's original story. I was pleased, the ending I had created was much better! BUT, scrawled on the bottom by Bob Johns circa 1996 (the last time I ever contemplated adapting it) was a note for an alternate ending, which was just as interesting - I like it so much I'm going to use it for my next project, which is already formulating. Anyone believe in fate!?

I didn't show Barry this last page, I will after we have finished the movie and besides, he is already busting with ideas, and can't wait to get down to some hard work and commit them to paper.

We feel that already this script is ready for a third opinion, a professional opinion. This will therefore be the draft we hopefully take to ScreenEast or some such body, I have no idea what they will make of it...